I am a Year 4 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 12 and my teacher is Miss Izelle. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Wow, I can tell a lot of thought has gone into this poem! I can really see the personification that you have been learning about. The tree is waving (like a person would). The flowers are calling your name (like a person would). And the rhyming words give the poem rhythm too. I'm looking forward to reading more of your poetry. Tino pai.
Hi Nikira, I agree with Mr Cossey. I can definitely see your developing strength in using personification. Good use of precise verb 'blooming'. A little reminder to use complete sentences: The swings are flowing/The flowers are blooming. Well done!
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Beautiful poem Nikira.
ReplyDeleteWow, I can tell a lot of thought has gone into this poem!
ReplyDeleteI can really see the personification that you have been learning about.
The tree is waving (like a person would).
The flowers are calling your name (like a person would).
And the rhyming words give the poem rhythm too.
I'm looking forward to reading more of your poetry. Tino pai.
Thank you Mr Cossey!
DeleteHi Nikira, I agree with Mr Cossey. I can definitely see your developing strength in using personification. Good use of precise verb 'blooming'. A little reminder to use complete sentences: The swings are flowing/The flowers are blooming. Well done!
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